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The diagrams show two methods of using water to produce electricity.

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The diagrams provide information about two techniques how water can be used in producing electricity. It has shown in order how the hydroelectric dam and wave air generator working. Firstly, the gate must be let the water in and then the water is become faster because the width and angel of penstock. Next, the water will be turned the turbine and the spindle. The spindle is rotated in generator to produce electric power. water then through the turbine are gone down and water is realised to the river. The next two ways, waves are entered through the lower chamber. The wave air will be grown through the small hole in the right side. Subsequently, it will be hit the spindle rotates to produce the electric power. the second, air is gone down from upper cumbers. The air will be raised and turned the turbine and spindle so it will be chanced the direction.
The diagrams provide information about two techniques how
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water
can be
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used
in producing electricity. It has shown in order how the hydroelectric dam and wave
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air
generator working.

Firstly
, the gate
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must
be
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let
the
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water
in and then the
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water
is become
faster
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because
the width and angel of
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penstock
.
Next
, the
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water
will
be turned
the turbine and the spindle. The spindle
is rotated
in generator to produce electric power.
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water
then through the turbine
are gone
down and
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water
is
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realised
to the river.

The
next
two ways, waves
are entered
through the lower chamber. The wave
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air
will
be grown
through the
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small
hole
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in the right side
.
Subsequently
, it will
be hit
the spindle rotates to produce the electric power.
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the
second,
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air
is gone
down from upper cumbers. The
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air
will
be raised
and turned the turbine and spindle
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so
it will
be chanced
the direction.

IELTS academic The diagrams show two methods of using water to produce electricity.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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