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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The presented line graph illustrates the percentage of people older than 65 in the three countries USA, Sweden and Japan between 1940 and 2040. The overall trend in all three countries is an estimated significant increase in older inhabitants until 2040. The USA started out with the highest amount of older population in 1940 at approximately nine percent, whereas Japan just had five percent and Swedens’ number laid in the middle of both of them with about seven percent. Sweden had a constant increase in numbers until it reached 20 % in about 2010, however, there is an estimated drop in numbers shown in-between then and 2030 before it supposedly will gain its peak with 25 % in 2040. The USA showed a climb to 15% in 1980, but the numbers settled on a plateau after a slight fall until 2020. The number is supposed to rise up again to 23 % in 2040. Different to both other countries, Japan's number of older people stayed very low- beneath 5 %- until after 2000 before it started to rise tremendously and is assumed to be the one country with the highest amount of seniors in 2040 with 27%.
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people
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older
than 65 in the

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three
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USA, Sweden and Japan between 1940 and 2040. The
overall
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trend


in all three
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countries
is an estimated significant increase in
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older
inhabitants until

2040.

The USA
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started
out with the highest amount of
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older
population in 1940 at

approximately nine percent, whereas Japan
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had five percent and
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Swedens
’

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number
laid in the middle of both of them with about seven percent. Sweden had
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a


constant increase in
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numbers
until it reached 20 % in about 2010,
however
, there is

an estimated drop in
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shown in-between then and 2030
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before
it

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supposedly
will gain its peak with 25 % in 2040. The USA
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showed
a climb to 15%
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in


1980,
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the
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settled on a plateau after a slight fall until 2020. The
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number


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is
supposed to rise up again to 23 % in 2040.

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to both other
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countries
, Japan's
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of
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older
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people
stayed
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very
low-

beneath 5 %- until after 2000
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before
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started
to rise
tremendously
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is assumed


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to
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with the highest amount of seniors in 2040 with 27%.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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