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the following graphs give information about the gross domestic product and employment sectors of a developing country

The graphs illustrate the proportion of employment and GDP in 3 sectors of developing country between 1986 and 1995, but the main focus will be in 1992. Overall, the highest percentage of GDP was in services sector, which has reached more than 60% in 1986. However, it has dropped gradually from 1987 until 1995. Therefore, in 1992, the GDP only got 58%. Following with natural resources, it has declined slowly as well as services sector. Conversely, the industry has increased steadily from 1986 until 1995, and got 15. 4% of GDP in 1992. On the other hand, the proportion of employment in natural resources was dominated in the 3 sectors, which has three-quarter of the total. Next, the employment of services has attained 10. 2%, while the GDP has reached more than 50%. Meanwhile, for the industry sector, it had the lowest distribution of employment among them. It only had 3. 6% which is not more than 5%. In conclusion, the highest percentage of employment was in natural resources, which has 77. 4%. Similarly, the highest GDP was in services, with more than 50%.
The graphs illustrate the proportion of
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between 1986 and 1995,
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the main focus will be in 1992.

Overall
, the highest percentage of GDP was in
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services
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sector
, which has reached more than 60% in 1986.
However
, it has dropped
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from 1987 until 1995.
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58%. Following with natural resources, it has declined
slowly
as well
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services
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sector
.
Conversely
, the industry has increased
steadily
from 1986 until 1995, and
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15. 4% of GDP in 1992.

On the other hand
, the proportion of
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employment
in natural resources
was dominated
in the 3
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sectors
, which has three-quarter of the total.
Next
, the
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employment
of
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services
has attained 10. 2%, while the GDP has reached more than 50%. Meanwhile, for the industry
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sector
, it had the lowest distribution of
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employment
among them. It
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had 3. 6% which is not more than 5%.

In conclusion
, the highest percentage of
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employment
was in natural resources, which has 77. 4%.
Similarly
, the highest GDP was in
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services
, with more than 50%.
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