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The graph below shows the population of people in different age groups between 2015 and 2070.

The graph below shows the population of people in different age groups between 2015 and 2070. DN5bm
The given data forecasts the population of individuals as a whole and above 75 including the percentages of the individuals aged above 75 in some country from the period of 2015 to 2070. Firstly, by analyzing the given table we can observe that there has been a consistent rise in the population in total 5 and half decade similar trend can be observed with almost double the rise in the population of individuals aged above 75 throughout the span. From the initial analysis we observe that there was gradual increase in population around 7 million jumps in overall population whereas a 3 million incline can be observed in the case of individuals which is around 3% with age above 75 from the period 2015 to 2030, considering the year 2025 and 2030 a slight increase can be predicted. Furthermore, we can notice a dramatic increase of population in the period 2030 to 2070 with 11 rise in total population similarly about 4 million incline with 3% rise can be predicted in 75 plus aged group while In the year 2050 to 2070 a jump of 2 million can be observed
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data forecasts the
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population
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individuals
as a whole and
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above
75 including the percentages of the
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individuals
aged
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above
75 in
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some
country from the period of 2015 to 2070.

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, by analyzing the
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given
table we can observe that there has been a consistent
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rise
in the
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population
in total 5 and half decade similar trend can
be observed
with almost double the
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rise
in the
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population
of
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individuals
aged
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above
75 throughout the span.

From the initial analysis we observe that there was gradual increase in
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population
around 7
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million
jumps in
overall
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population
whereas a 3
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million
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can
be observed
in the case of
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individuals
which is around 3% with age
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above
75 from the period 2015 to 2030, considering the year 2025 and 2030 a slight increase can
be predicted
.

Furthermore
, we can notice a dramatic increase of
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population
in the period 2030 to 2070 with 11
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rise
in total
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population
similarly
about 4
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million
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incline
with 3%
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rise
can
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in 75 plus aged group while In the year 2050 to 2070 a jump of 2
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million
can
be observed
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the population of people in different age groups between 2015 and 2070.

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