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The graph belows the number of prisons i between in1930 and 1980.

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the graph illustrates amount of prisons in 5 different countries between in 1930 and 1980. As can be seen from graph, 1n 1930, amount of prisons in great Britain was so law, appromixtly 30bthousands, Newertheles, its' singpost had illustrated until 1940. Moreover in that countries had make headway about prisons. In general, the line had really developed from 1930 to 1980 which was USA. Notwithstanding, Other four countries had increased from 1970 to 1980.
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developed from 1930 to 1980 which was USA. Notwithstanding, Other four countries had increased from 1970 to 1980.
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