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The graph below shows the percentage of people who travelled by bus in the UK from 2009 to 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the percentage of people who travelled by bus in the UK from 2009 to 2011. eNqG
The tabular data illustrates the proportion of individuals who use one particular transport bus for travel in UK between three different years 2009, 2010 and 2011 for five various purpose. From the cursory glance, it can be seen that for work purpose travelling by bus was decrease while travelled for shopping was increase. To start with, in 2009, 65 % people travelled by bus for shopping while 56% individuals in 2010 use bus for travelling for same purpose. In contrast to this, for shopping 51 % public prefer bus for travelling in 2011. 5% use bus for travelled to the work whereas this ratio decrease to the 2% in 2010 and in 2011, completely dropped by the individuals. Furthermore, use bus to travel for visiting friend was 19 % in 2009, while in 2010, people use same proportion (19%) for travelled to same purpose. On the other hand, this percentage increased by 4% in 2011 for visiting friends by bus. For both he study and day tour purpose use of bus for travelling had almost similar trend in 2009, whereas in 2010 and 2011, bus used for day tour purpose by people increased by 3% then study purpose. Overall, it can be seen from the table that both shopping and going for work purpose use of bus was less likewise for all other purpose use of bus was high over the time.
The tabular data illustrates the proportion of individuals who
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years 2009, 2010 and 2011 for five various
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that for work
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by bus was decrease while
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for
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was increase.

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with, in 2009, 65 %
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by bus for
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while 56% individuals in 2010
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bus for
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51 % public prefer bus for
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in 2011. 5%
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bus for
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to the work whereas this ratio decrease to the 2% in 2010 and in 2011, completely dropped by the individuals.

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bus to travel for visiting friend was 19 % in 2009, while in 2010,
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same proportion (19%) for
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, this percentage increased by 4% in 2011 for visiting friends by bus. For both he
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of bus for
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had almost similar trend in 2009, whereas in 2010 and 2011, bus
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for day tour
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increased by 3% then study purpose.

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from the table that both
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of bus was less
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of bus was high over the time.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of people who travelled by bus in the UK from 2009 to 2011.

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