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The graph below shows the percentage of obese men and women in four different countries, according to a report relevant

The graph below shows the percentage of obese men and women in four different countries, according to a report relevant Ml9ak
The following graph shows the percentage of overweight men and women in four other countries according to a report in 2013 Overall the males are more obese than females. Iceland is more affected from obesity The Men of Iceland and Malta are over the 70 percentage and women of USA and Iceland are over the 60 percentage. UK women are below the 60, Malta women's are also under 60. USA and UK man are below 70,
The following graph
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shows
the percentage of overweight
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men
and women in four other countries according to a report in 2013

Overall
the males are more obese than females. Iceland is more
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affected
from
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obesity


The
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Men
of Iceland and Malta are over the 70 percentage and women
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of USA
and Iceland are over the 60 percentage.
The genitive is possibly missing.
UK women
are below the 60, Malta women's are
also
under 60. USA and UK
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man
are below 70,
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of obese men and women in four different countries, according to a report relevant

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