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The graph below shows the percentage of money utilize on three sector from 2001 to 2021 and prediction till 2051

The graph below shows the percentage of money utilize on three sector from 2001 to 2021 and prediction till 2051 rbkLn
The line graph illustrates the percentage of money spent on education, medical care and pension in one country between 2001 and 2021 and the estimation about money that will be spent in future years till 2051. A glance at the graph reveals that the percentage of money spent on pension was 6% in the year of 2001 which remained stable till 2021. However, it is estimated that the percentile of spending on pension will increase moderately and will reach at 18% by 2051. In addition, in the year of 2001, almost 15% investment was made on education sector, whereas there was a marginal decrease in this proportion by 2021 and it is forecasted that it will remain level off in next 20-30 years. What is more, the percentum of money utilized on medical care was 11% in 2001 and there was an incline of only 1% till 2021 to 12%, while it is predicted that this percentage will decline till 2051 and will reach at 4%. Overall, the highest proportion of money was spent on education sector which is estimated to remain constant in future years, whilst the least of spent on pension sector and it will follow upward trend in further years.
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was 6% in the
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of 2001 which remained stable till 2021.
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of 2001, almost 15% investment
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20-30 years.

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1% till 2021 to 12%, while it
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