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The graph below shows the number of deaths due to terrorist attack in three countries from 2011 to 2015.

The graph below shows the number of deaths due to terrorist attack in three countries from 2011 to 2015. 2am7J

The line graph illustrates the information on the number of deaths caused by to terrorism in three countries begin Afghanistan, Iraq and Nigeria for 5 consistent years (2011- 2015). Overall, number of deaths due to terrorist attack were most in Iraq in comparison with other two countries. Although least number of death in 2015 was in Nigeria. In the 2011, all three countries had almost same number of deaths which was around 3000, however, that went down after a year at a range between 2000-3000. in 2013, amount of deaths in Iraq had drastic increase to more than 6000 and Nigeria being less than 5000 whereas, Afghanistan had almost same number of death as in 2011. Moreover, in 2014 Iraq had a linear increase which went up to 9000 deaths whereas, Nigreia's and Afghanistan's deaths were at a range of 7000-8000 and 4000-5000 respectively. After a year, Iraq and Nigeria had a parallel decrease to 7000 and 5000 respectively, whereas, Afghanistan had increase in deaths which was a little more than 5000.

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 Afghanistan, Iraq and Nigeria for 5 consistent years (Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.2011 – 20152011–2015
2011- 2015
).

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 of deaths due to terrorist attack were most in Iraq in comparison
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 of death in 2015 was in Nigeria.

In the 2011, all three countries had almost same You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
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 2013, amount of deaths in Iraq had drastic increase to more than 6000 and Nigeria being less than 5000 whereas, Afghanistan had almost same You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
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 of death as in 2011.

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's and Afghanistan's deaths were at a range of 7000-8000 and 4000-5000 respectively
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