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The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004

The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004 GwbLQ
The bar chart illustrates the estimated population of elephants in some countries in Asia between 1997 and 2004 In general, it is presented in the chart that all nine countries had a downward trend in the distribution of elephants in the period of 7 years from 1997, except for Cambodia, which had a slight increase of the number of elephants. In 1997, there were about 10000 elephants living in India, which was the highest among nine countries, while the second rank was Myanmar, which was half of the figure for India. In contrast, China had the fewest elephants, about 1000 individuals, whereas the figure for Vietnam, Cambodia and Laos had more, but not noticeably. Meanwhile, Malaysia and Sri Lanka had the same population of elephants, about 3000, while that of Thailand was 4000. The period of seven years witnessed the most significant drop in the numbers of elephants in Malaysia and Thailand, which fell more than 50% of the figure in 1997. India still had the most elephants, although there was a decrease of more than 2000 individuals. Likewise, the quantity of elephants in China continued to be the lowest figure, even bottoming out at 500. The figures for Vietnam, Cambodia and Laos were quite steady and reached about 1000, while that of Sri Lanka and Myanmar declined mildly, about 100 to 200 individuals less than the figure in seven years ago.
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countries in Asia between 1997 and 2004

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in the period of 7 years from 1997,
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Cambodia, which had a slight increase of the number of elephants.

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living in India, which was the highest among nine countries, while the second rank was Myanmar, which was half of the
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for India.
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, about 1000 individuals, whereas the
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for Vietnam, Cambodia and Laos had more,
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. Meanwhile, Malaysia and Sri Lanka had the same population of
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, about 3000, while that of Thailand was 4000.

The period of seven years witnessed the most significant drop in the numbers of
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in Malaysia and Thailand, which fell more than 50% of the
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in 1997. India
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, although there was a decrease of more than 2000 individuals.
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in China continued to be the lowest
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, even bottoming out at 500. The
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for Vietnam, Cambodia and Laos were quite steady and reached about 1000, while that of Sri Lanka and Myanmar declined
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in seven years ago.
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