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Number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013

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The given graph compares the three museums of London about the number of visitors visiting in Summer 2013. Monthly data of footfalls ranged between 300 to 800 thousands for British Museum, Science Museum and Natural History Museum. Primarily Graph depicts that in June 2013, more than 600 thousands travellers were attracted to British Museum making it highest among three. Secondly, Science Museum had lower number of people visiting in June 2013. Moreover, in month July 2013 the visitors of British Museum skyrocketed to around 800 thousands whereas Science and Natural History museum visitors declined under 400 thousands. On the other hand, in month of August 2013 there was dip in visitors for British and Science Museum whereas Science Museum visitors remained stable. Surprisingly in September 2013 all the three museums had a sharp incline in number of guests visiting museum to more than 400 thousands each. In all the three museums there was a rebound compared to June 2013 and September 2013. Science and natural museum became identical in September 2013 to almost 450 thousands visitors.
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graph compares the three
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of London about the number of
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visiting in Summer 2013. Monthly data of footfalls ranged
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between 300 to 800
thousands for British
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Museum
,
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Science
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and Natural History Museum.

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making it highest among three.
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Science
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Museum
had lower number of
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people
visiting in June 2013.
Moreover
, in month July 2013 the
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visitors
of British
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skyrocketed to around 800 thousands whereas
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Science
and Natural History
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museum
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visitors
declined under 400 thousands.

On the other hand
, in month of August 2013 there was dip in
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visitors
for British and
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Science
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Museum
whereas
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Science
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Museum
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visitors
remained stable.
Surprisingly
in September 2013 all the three
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museums
had a sharp incline in number of guests visiting
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to more than 400 thousands each.

In all the three
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there was a rebound compared to June 2013 and September 2013.
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Science
and natural
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became identical in September 2013 to almost 450 thousands
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visitors
.
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