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The bar graph compares the information about various fast food advertisements viewed by two different kids age groups in the United States of America every year. Overall, All kids enjoy viewing Mcdonald's promotions. While Arby's receive less popularity from middle childhood kids. Similarly, the preschool group of children shows little interest to show Wendy's fast food Advertisements. The second most favored advertisement in both groups is of Subway, It is 81 and 63 number for both age groups between 6-11(middle childhood) and 2-5(preschool children) respectively. Now for Preschool children, there is quite a competition between two advertisements Burger King and Dominos as it gains same viewers every year which is about 60 number. Similarly, Subway challenges Pizza hut through its advertisements as it attracts the same amount of audience. Although Arby's, KFC, Little Caesars and Taco Bell have a difference in their audiences around 10% however in this group Arby' receive love from 19 children. On another hand for middle age childhood children, Dominos and Burger King hold the almost same amount of children which is 72 and 71 respectively. At the same time, Little Caesars having almost half the popularity of the Dominos. Taco Bell is having 46 children viewers while Wendy's has more 2 child viewers than Taco Bell. KFC grasp 30 children's attraction through its advertisements.
The bar graph compares the information about various
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viewed by two
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kids age
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in the United States of America every year.
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Mcdonald
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less popularity from middle childhood kids.
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of
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Wendy's
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food Advertisements.

The second most favored
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in both
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is of Subway, It is 81 and 63 number for both age
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between 6-11(middle childhood) and 2-5(preschool
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respectively
.
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for Preschool
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, there is quite a competition between two
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Burger King and
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Dominos
as it gains same viewers every year which is about 60 number.
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, Subway challenges
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Pizza hut
through its
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as it attracts the same amount of audience. Although
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Arby
's, KFC,
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Caesars and Taco Bell
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however
in this
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from 19 children.

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,
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Dominos
and Burger King hold the almost same amount of
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which is 72 and 71
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Caesars having almost half the popularity of the
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. Taco Bell is having 46
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viewers while Wendy's has more 2 child viewers than Taco Bell. KFC grasp 30 children's attraction through its
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IELTS academic fast food advertisements

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
219 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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