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The graph below shows the monthly profits of 3 British companies in the car retail industry for the 2000 financial year write a report for a university lecturer comparing the performance of acme sports car and Branson motors for the period given

The diagram illustrates the monthly income of the 3 British car companies. Furthermore the 2000 financial year was divided into 4 quarters. Overall it can be seen that Acme sports cars started with the highest sales, while British motors begins with the lowest profit but succeeded Acme sports cars in the continuing quarters. Acme sports cars stood in a profit of 70, 000 pounds, however it gradually declines to 60, 000 in the first two months of the first quarter. Additionally, it significantly drops its sales at the end of the second quarter with just 10, 000 pounds. Interestingly at the beginning of the 3rd quarter, it rose steadily to 20, 000 sales and remained constant throughout the 3rd quarter. Moreover, its sales gradually increased into the end of the financial year with 40, 000 profits. On the other hand, Branson motors has the lowest profit starting with 20, 000 but steadily increased to 40, 000 at the end of the 1st quarter. Whereas, it's profit was unchanged at 60, 000 for the last 2 months of the 2nd quarter. However, in the 3rd quarter, its sales fluctuate and ended the quarter with 50, 000 profits. Subsequentially, it has increased its profits at 60, 000 at the end of the financial year.
The diagram illustrates the monthly income of the 3 British
car
companies
.
Furthermore
the 2000 financial year
was divided
into 4
quarters
.
Overall
it can be
seen
that Acme sports
cars
started
with the highest
sales
, while British motors
begins
with the lowest
profit
but
succeeded Acme sports
cars
in the continuing quarters.

Acme sports
cars
stood in a
profit
of 70, 000 pounds,
however
it
gradually
declines to 60, 000 in the
first
two months of the
first
quarter
.
Additionally
, it
significantly
drops its
sales
at the
end
of the second
quarter
with
just
10, 000 pounds.
Interestingly
at the beginning of the 3rd
quarter
, it rose
steadily
to 20, 000
sales
and remained constant throughout the 3rd
quarter
.
Moreover
, its
sales
gradually
increased into the
end
of the financial year with 40, 000 profits.

On the other hand
, Branson motors has the lowest
profit
starting with 20, 000
but
steadily
increased to 40, 000 at the
end
of the 1st
quarter
. Whereas,
it's
profit
was unchanged
at 60, 000 for the last 2 months of the 2nd
quarter
.
However
, in the 3rd
quarter
, its
sales
fluctuate and ended the
quarter
with 50, 000
profits
.
Subsequentially
, it has increased its
profits
at 60, 000 at the
end
of the financial year.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the monthly profits of 3 British companies in the car retail industry for the 2000 financial year write a report for a university lecturer comparing the performance of acme sports car and Branson motors for the period given

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