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The provided bar chart clearly displays and compares the proportion of three regions consisting of agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services to the UK economy between 1900 and 2000. Overall, it is lucid that whilst there was a substantial growth in the figure for the contribution of business and financial services, the contribution of agriculture and manufacturing was significantly declined. Standing at nearly 50 % in 1990, the contribution of agriculture reached a peak at over a half in 1950. There was a dramatic decrease to 10 % in the agriculture contribution in 1975 and this figure reduced quickly to 2 %. Similarly, the manufacturing contribution dropped during the period. The figure for contributed to manufacturing accounted for 45 % in 1990 before experiencing a dramatical drop of 8 % in 1950. There was a slight fall to over 30 % in the contribution of manufacturing in 1975, which was followed by a sharp dip to under 20% at the end of the period. By contrast, the business and financial services sector rose steeply during the period. At the beginning of the period, the contribution of business and financial stood at approximately 4%. In the following 50 years, this figure increased slightly to under 10%, which was followed by a considerable climb to over 20% in 1975 and peaked at 35% in 2000.
The provided bar chart
clearly
displays and compares the proportion of three regions consisting of
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agriculture
,
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manufacturing
and
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business
and
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financial
services to the UK economy between 1900 and 2000.

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, it is lucid that whilst there was a substantial growth in the
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figure
for the
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contribution
of
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business
and
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financial
services, the
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contribution
of
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agriculture
and
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manufacturing
was
significantly
declined.

Standing at
nearly
50 % in 1990, the
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contribution
of
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agriculture
reached a peak at over a half in 1950. There was a dramatic decrease to 10 % in the
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agriculture
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contribution
in 1975 and this
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figure
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reduced
quickly
to 2 %.
Similarly
, the
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manufacturing
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contribution
dropped during the period. The
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figure
for contributed to
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manufacturing
accounted for 45 % in 1990
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before
experiencing a
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dramatical
drop of 8 % in 1950. There was a slight fall to over 30 % in the
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contribution
of
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manufacturing
in 1975, which
was followed
by a sharp dip to under 20% at the
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end
of the period.

By contrast, the
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business
and
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financial
services sector rose
steeply
during the period. At the beginning of the period, the
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contribution
of
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business
and
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financial
stood at approximately 4%. In the following 50 years, this
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figure
increased
slightly
to under 10%, which
was followed
by a considerable climb to over 20% in 1975 and peaked at 35% in 2000.

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6.0
Overall Band Score
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