Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The drawings below show the process of desertification..

The drawings below show the process of desertification. . 8xGew
The table shows the period of one place completely changed into a city in a few years. Overall, From the one place which was totally full of trees and this was changed in total 8 phase. From the jungle to city, in this time there are many colonies established and make it good place to live. To begin with, phase 1 the place have to so many trees and very good land. In Next phase, people almost cut all trees and made good land for their habitats. Afterwards, some people started to living at that place and in few times few houses also made by some people with farming. but the climate was changed due to lack of trees and almost everything changed, land soil eresion. In phase 7 the the sun rose and everything changed, exposure of sunlight reflected back into the air and weather turned into sunny. Finally, few people begin to leave this place and in few time it is convert into a city.
The table
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the period of one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
into a city in a few years.
Overall
, From the one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
which was
totally
full of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
and this was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
in total 8
Possible agreement error. The noun 'phase' seems to be countable, so consider using: "phases".
phase
. From the jungle to city, in this time there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
colonies established and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phase
1 the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
land. In
Next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phase
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
almost
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
and made
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
land for their habitats. Afterwards,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to living at that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
and in few times few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
also
made by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with farming.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
but
the climate was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
due to lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
and almost everything
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
, land soil
Possible spelling mistake found.
eresion
. In
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phase
7
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "the" or "the" is left.
the the
sun rose and everything
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
, exposure of sunlight reflected back into the air and weather turned into sunny.
Finally
, few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
and in few time it is
Consider using a past participle here: "converted".
convert
into a city.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The drawings below show the process of desertification. .

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
167 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The drawings below show the process of desertification..