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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. AXml
The mentioned line graph displays information about the usage of fish and types of meat which includes Chicken, beef and lamb between the year 1979 and 2004 in a European country. The utilisation of fish was 52 grams per week in 1979 consumed by per person. At the end of 2004, only 5 grams has been reduced between the given period of time. The usage of fish is been maintained overall the period of time. However, in 1979 Beef was most consumed by people which was 220 grams per person in a week whereas Chicken and Lamb was almost in the same range which was 149 grams and 150 grams respectively. Over the period of time, the consumption of chicken was increased amongst the people leading it to 250 grams per person per week. Alternatively, Beef and lamb reduced by half of the consumed amount in 1979. Overall, it is noted that throughout the mentioned period, the consumption of chicken has highly increased while Beef and lamb reduced to a greater extend.
The mentioned line graph displays information about the usage of fish and types of meat which includes Chicken,
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beef
and
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lamb
between the year 1979 and 2004 in a European country.

The
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utilisation
of fish was 52
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grams
per week in 1979 consumed by per person. At the
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end
of 2004,
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only
5
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grams
has been
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reduced
between the
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given
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period
of time. The usage of fish
is been
maintained
overall
the
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period
of time.

However
, in 1979
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Beef
was most consumed by
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people
which was 220
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grams
per person in a week whereas Chicken and
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Lamb
was almost in the same range which was 149
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grams
and 150
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grams
respectively
. Over the
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period
of time, the consumption of chicken
was increased
amongst the
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people
leading it to 250
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grams
per person per week.
Alternatively
,
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Beef
and
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lamb
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reduced
by half of the consumed amount in 1979.

Overall
, it
is noted
that throughout the mentioned
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period
, the consumption of chicken has
highly
increased while
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Beef
and
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lamb
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reduced
to a greater
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extend
.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

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