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The graph below shows the percentage of 18-25 year olds in universities in four different countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of 18-25 year olds in universities in four different countries. YOlB

The provided line graph depicts the proportion of the group age of 18-25 in universities in four different countries (Singapore, Malaysis, Philippines and Thailand) between 1961 and 2011. Overall, what stands out from the graph that the highest percentages of teenagers in universities were in Singapore and Thailand. Whereas, the lowest percentage of 18-25 years old was in Malaysia. In 1961, almost 25% of young generations was in Thailand. Comparing to the percentage of adults students in Singapore, which was 15%. After that, the figure for Singapore experienced a significant oscillations until the end of the period, at about 40%. On the other hand, despite decreasing the proportion of ages between 18-25 years old in Thailand, it then saw a sharp increase until 2011. Turning to the Malaysia and Philippines, it is clear that both of them started at less than 8%. However, the rate of under graduates in Malaysia dramatically doubled by 10% from 1971 to 2011. But, the figure for Philippines saw a mild growth till 1991, after that it remained stable towards the end of the period.

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