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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. 2Y8A
The given line graph represents the fish and some type of meat consumed by European people in a week during 1979 to 2004. Overall, The Figures for fish remained the least throughout the given period of time while the consumption of chicken was significantly mounted and became the most eaten meat ever. In 1979, The total grams of beef which purchased by European consumers was highest, at approximately 220 grams per person per week. On the other side, Fish experienced the lowest consumption of only about 60 grams. The figures for chicken and lamb were nearly same, at under 150 grams and exactly 150 grams respectively. From 1979 to 2004, the country witnessed a significant growth to around 200 grams in the consumption of chicken. By contrast, about 50 grams of lamb was eaten, compared to approximately 40 grams of fish in 2004. Although the expenditure on beef reached a peak of about 240 grams in 1983, this fell steadily to just over 100 grams in 2004.
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line graph represents the fish and
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some
type of meat consumed by European
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people
in a week during 1979 to 2004.

Overall
, The Figures for fish remained the least throughout the
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period of time while the consumption of chicken was
significantly
mounted and became the most eaten meat ever.

In 1979, The total
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grams
of beef which
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purchased
by European consumers was highest, at approximately 220
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grams
per person per week.

On the other side, Fish experienced the lowest consumption of
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only
about 60
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grams
. The figures for chicken and lamb were
nearly
same, at under 150
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grams
and exactly 150
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grams
respectively
.

From 1979 to 2004, the country witnessed a significant growth to around 200
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grams
in the consumption of chicken.

By contrast, about 50
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grams
of lamb
was eaten
, compared to approximately 40
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grams
of fish in 2004.

Although the expenditure on beef reached a peak of about 240
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grams
in 1983, this fell
steadily
to
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just
over 100
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grams
in 2004.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

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