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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. 563km
The graph below giving the information about the the consumption of fish, lamb, beef and chicken in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Overall, In Europe chicken was highest consumed and fish was lowest eaten by the people. And until was grams per person per week. Fish was eaten by European people in 1979 was approx. 59 grams per person. In 1984 and 1989 it was decreased as as approx 41 grams and 47 grams respectively. In 1994 it was steady condition, and again in 1999 it's decreased about 32 grams. In last 2004, about 33 grams per person per week. Lamb was taken by individuals in 1979 was approximately 150 grams, in 1984 it was decreased and up to 120 grams. In the year of 1989 it's 100 grams/person/week. In 1994 and 1999 rate of decreased was 61 grams and 49 grams respectively. In 2004 again 60 grams per person per week. If we talk about beef and chicken, so beef was consumed by European people in the year of 1979 to 2004 were about 170, 240, 190, 170, 145, and 120 grams respectively. Chicken was eaten by individuals of Europe in the year of 1979 was 140 grams, in 1984 170 grams, in 1989 190 grams, in 1974 it was 160 grams, in 1999 it's increased up to 220 grams and last in 2004 it again increase up to 250 grams.
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. In 1984 and 1989 it was
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in the year of 1979 to 2004 were about 170, 240, 190, 170, 145, and 120
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, in 1984 170
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, in 1989 190
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, in 1974 it was 160
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, in 1999 it's increased up to 220
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

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