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As the graph shows how many hours per week adolescents take up doing certain tasks in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

As the graph shows how many hours per week adolescents take up doing certain tasks in Chester from 2002 to 2007. BJlL6

As the graph shows how many hours per week adolescents take up doing certain tasks in Chester from 2002 to 2007. Overall, the rise of watching television was more and it was a popular activity among the other activities. Whereas bowling was the least favourite. Going to pubs or discos and shopping have increased through years. While doing sports and homework have decreased DVD was the only one which showed fluctuations. Adolescents spent 25 hours in a week in the years 2002 and 2003 which increased to more than 35 hours by 2007. Going to pubs or discos and shopping have also gradually increased through the years from 5 to 15 hours and more. While teenagers occupied 10 hours for doing homework, the figure dropped down to 5 hours by 2007. Playing sports also has considerably decreased from 10 hours to less than 5 hours by 2007. Bowling was under 5 and it totally decreased to less than 4 by 2007. DVD’s have fluctuated through years from 10 to more than 15 and again to 10 hours by 2007.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 the graph This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 how This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 per week adolescents take up doing certain tasks in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

Overall
, the rise of watching television was more and it was a popular activity among the other activities. “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
 bowling was the least Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.favorite
favourite
. Going to pubs or discos and shopping have increased through years. While doing sports and homework have decreased DVD was the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 one which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 fluctuations.

Adolescents spent 25 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 in a week in the years 2002 and 2003 which increased to more than 35 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 by 2007. Going to pubs or discos and shopping have also
gradually
 increased through the years from 5 to 15 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 and more.

While This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 occupied 10 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 for doing homework, the figure This phrase is redundant. Consider using "dropped".dropped
dropped down
 to 5 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 by 2007. Playing sports also
 has considerably
 decreased from 10 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 to less than 5 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 by 2007. Bowling was under 5 and it totally
 decreased to less than 4 by 2007. DVD’s have fluctuated through years from 10 to more than 15 and again to 10 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 by 2007. 