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The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spread from 1981 to 2007

The presented line graph gives data on the consumption of three different spreads, such as margarine, low fat and butter, commencing from 1981 to 2007. At the first glance, it is indicated the grams on the vertical axis, and the years on the horizontal axis. It is shown that butter experienced a significant downward trend, while margarine remained neutral for several years, and low fat and reduced spreads experienced a tremendous improvement comparing to the other spreads. All of them had ups and downs in consumption during the given years. Although butter initially had the highest grams in consumption, it outraced low fat and reduced spread at the end of the period. In 1981, the highest consumption in grams was butter, starting from 140g, after passing five years, it showed a significant increase, which changed the consumption rate, then, the consumption in grams started collapsing rapidly, starting from year 1986, which lasted till 2007. Margarine consumption showed a steady consumption rates following the years from1981 to 2001. It is obvious that after 2001, the consumption rate dropped noticeably. Comparing to the other spreads, consumption of low fat and reduced spread started later, in 1996, it is clear that low fats moved upward faster in the following years, but then had a slight drop in 2007.
The presented line graph gives data on the
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consumption
of three
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different
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spreads
, such as margarine,
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low
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fat
and
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butter
, commencing from 1981 to 2007.

At the
first
glance, it
is indicated
the
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grams
on the vertical axis, and the years on the horizontal axis. It
is shown
that
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butter
experienced a significant downward trend, while margarine remained neutral for several years, and
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low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
experienced a tremendous improvement comparing to the other
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spreads
. All of them had ups and downs in
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consumption
during the
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given
years. Although
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butter
initially
had the highest
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grams
in
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consumption
, it outraced
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low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spread
at the
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end
of the period.

In 1981, the highest
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consumption
in
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grams
was
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butter
, starting from 140g, after passing five years, it
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showed
a significant increase, which
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changed
the
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consumption
rate, then, the
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consumption
in
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grams
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started
collapsing
rapidly
, starting from
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year
1986, which lasted till 2007.

Margarine
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consumption
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showed
a steady
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consumption
rates following the years from1981 to 2001. It is obvious that after 2001, the
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consumption
rate dropped
noticeably
.

Comparing to the other
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spreads
,
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consumption
of
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low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spread
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started
later, in 1996, it is
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clear
that
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low
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fats
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moved
upward faster in the following years,
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but
then had a slight drop in 2007.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spread from 1981 to 2007

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