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The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. v.1

The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. v. 1
The graph shows the estimated highest population of elephants in nine different Asian countries. Overall, India had the highest number of elephants and except in Cambodia and Laos, the number of elephants declined noticeably. According to the graph, elephants in most of the countries in the list fell in 2004 than that of earlier 1997. This was more prevalent in Malaysia and Thailand where the number of this species dropped to less than half the figure in 1997. In the former, the number of elephants fell as low as 1000. India remained the country with by far the largest elephant population but experienced a dramatic decline in the number of elephants in seven years. China had the least number of elephants which was a thousand only and this decreased to half of that in seven years. Although the trend was downwards overall, the elephant population in Laos and Vietnam remained almost the same, just over a thousand. The only country where elephant's population actually grew was Cambodia, where the number increased by 200.
The graph
shows
the estimated
highest
population
of
elephants
in nine
different
Asian
countries
.
Overall
, India had the highest
number
of
elephants
and except in Cambodia and Laos, the
number
of
elephants
declined
noticeably
.

According to the graph,
elephants
in most of the
countries
in the list fell in 2004 than that of earlier 1997. This was more prevalent in Malaysia and Thailand where the
number
of this species dropped to less than half the figure in 1997. In the former, the
number
of
elephants
fell as low as 1000.

India remained the
country
with by far the largest
elephant
population
but
experienced a dramatic decline in the
number
of
elephants
in seven years. China had the least
number
of
elephants
which was a thousand
only
and this decreased to half of that in seven years. Although the trend was downwards
overall
, the
elephant
population
in Laos and Vietnam remained almost the same,
just
over a thousand. The
only
country
where elephant's
population
actually grew was Cambodia, where the
number
increased by 200.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. v. 1

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