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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. LrwQ3
The visualized data in the graph depicts the average number of travelers (in millions) in UK per day by using different modes like car, bus or train. The data in the chart is showing the results from 1970 to 2030. First, I will explain those travelers who used their cars for commuting. Just over 5 million people were traveling by their cars in 1970 and by the passage of time the number has significantly increased. By 2030 the number of travelers hit a peak of 9 millions. Secondly, in 1970, the people who were travelling through buses were counted nearly 4 millions which gradually declined to 3 millions by 2030. Thirdly, the number pupils who used train as their travelling mode were just near 2 millions in number which increased to 3 million people within 3 decades and then stayed the same for next decade. The number of train travelers hit a high of approximately 5 millions by 2030. All in all, at the start, the number of commuters who used their car was noticeably higher than that ot train and buses. A noticeable rise is the car travelers can be seen on the year 2030 whereas the number of train users results higher than that of bus travelers.
The visualized data in the graph depicts the average
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in UK per day by using
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different
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car
, bus or
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train
. The data in the chart is showing the results from 1970 to 2030.

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travelers
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over 5
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people
were traveling by their
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in 1970 and by the passage of time the
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has
significantly
increased. By 2030 the
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travelers
hit a peak of 9 millions.

Secondly
, in 1970, the
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were travelling through buses
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which
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declined to 3
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by 2030.

Thirdly
, the
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pupils
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as their travelling mode were
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near 2
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which increased to 3
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within 3 decades and then stayed the same for
next
decade. The
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hit a high of approximately 5
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by 2030.

All in all, at the
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was
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train
and buses. A noticeable rise is the
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car
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travelers
can be
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on the year 2030 whereas the
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of
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train
users results higher than that of bus
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travelers
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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