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The line graph illustrates the information about enquiries received by tourist information office. it covers period of six months from the year 2011. overall representation shows that number of enquiries made by telephone and in-person are more then that of email or letter. after the month of march Both the up and down rising trends can be seen. People mostly chose the telephonic assistant in first three months of the year but after march it became the second most popular choice Till June. Almost 800 people chose the method of emailing or lettering to make enquiries yet over the year use of this procedure decreased tO almost 400 people. In the month of January making an enquiries in person was the least chosen way, only Around 400 used it but however over the period it became people's choice and in the june 1900 people made enquiries in person which was highest among all the methods.
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enquiries
received by tourist information office.
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from the year 2011.

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overall
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shows
that number of
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enquiries
made by telephone and in-person are more
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then
that of email or letter.
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after
the
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month
of march Both the up and down rising trends can be
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seen
.

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People
mostly
chose the telephonic assistant in
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three
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of the year
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it became the second most popular choice Till June.

Almost 800
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chose the method of emailing or lettering to
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yet
over the year
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use
of this procedure decreased
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tO
almost 400
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people
.

In the
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of January making an
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enquiries
in person was the least chosen way,
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Around 400
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's choice and in the
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1900
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made
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in person which was highest among all the methods.

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