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The chart below shows the number of visitor arriving in a particular country for a short trip, and the number of residents leaving that country for a short trip, from 2009 to 2011.

The chart below shows the number of visitor arriving in a particular country for a short trip, and the number of residents leaving that country for a short trip, from 2009 to 2011. 0ApN1
The line graph shows the number of people in a particular country arriving and departing on a short trip between 2009 and 2011. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the number of resident individuals who left the country was greater than the number of tourists who came during the specified period. According to the graph, both resident and tourist traveler’s number increased gradually and approximately at the same rate from October 10, 2009, to October 10, 2010. The number of resident departure started at 550 thousand trippers in October 2009 and raised to 605 thousand trippers in October 2010. While in the same period, the visitor arrival number started at 490 thousand tourists and raised to peak at 525 thousand tourists in October 2010. After October 2010, the resident departures number continues to increase dramatically and arrived at 650 thousand trippers in June 2011. While the visitor arrival number plummeted to 495 thousand trippers in June 2011
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in a particular country arriving and departing on a short trip between 2009 and 2011. At
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individuals who
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the country was greater than the
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of
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who came during the specified period.

According to the graph, both
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and
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traveler’s
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increased
gradually
and approximately at the same rate from October 10, 2009, to October 10, 2010. The
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of
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resident
departure
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started
at 550 thousand trippers in October 2009 and raised to 605 thousand trippers in October 2010. While in the same period, the visitor arrival
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at 490 thousand
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tourists
and raised to peak at 525 thousand
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tourists
in October 2010.

After October 2010, the
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resident
departures
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continues to increase
dramatically
and arrived at 650 thousand trippers in June 2011.
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the visitor arrival
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plummeted to 495 thousand trippers in June 2011

IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of visitor arriving in a particular country for a short trip, and the number of residents leaving that country for a short trip, from 2009 to 2011.

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