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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The line graph indicates the amount of carbon dioxide (CO2) released in 4 various nations from 1967 to 2007. Unit are measured in metric tonnes As an overall trend, the amount of carbon dioxide release per person in the United Kingdom and Sweden started higher than Italy and Portugal. However, the amount of carbon dioxide out put decreased, while in Italy and Portugal gradually increased though out the years. As is presented in the graph, in 1967, the amount of carbon dioxide out put was the highest at around 11 tonnes, while in Sweden just over 8 tonnes per person. Compare to Italy and Portugal with 1 and over 4 tonnes respectively. In 2007, the amount of carbon dioxide in United Kingdom went down slightly to about 9 tonnes, while there was dropped to less 6 in Sweden. By contrast, the amount of carbon dioxide released in Italy rose to nearly 8 tonnes and Portugal also rose to about 5 tonnes at the same period.
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dioxide release per person in the United Kingdom and Sweden
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dioxide out put decreased, while in Italy and Portugal
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dioxide out put was the highest at around 11 tonnes, while in Sweden
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over 8 tonnes per person. Compare to Italy and Portugal with 1 and over 4 tonnes
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In 2007, the
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dioxide released in Italy rose to
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

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