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The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar graph illustrates the three countries who spend money on five entertainment forms namely cinema, video, production, music and television in a over five year period. Overall it clearly seen that, the maximum spending on entertainment forms by United States, whereas the minimum amount spend on entertainment by Asia in the given time period. The money spending was increase the during five in all given countries. Looking at graph in more details, The maximum money spend on publication, while lowest on cinema all three countries. Asia spend 67 percent money on entertainment forms in 1995 which increased 110 percent in 2005. 97 percent money spend on various forms of entertainment by Europe and in the next five years spending was increase 131. In 1995, United States spend money on cinema, production, television, music and video were 187 percent but this figure incline considerably and reached 257 by 2000.
The bar graph illustrates the three countries who
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on five entertainment
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forms
namely
cinema, video, production,

music and television in
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clearly
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that, the maximum spending on entertainment
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forms
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by United States
, whereas the minimum amount
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on entertainment by Asia in the
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given
time period.

The
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spending was increase the during five in all
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given
countries.

Looking at graph in more
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details
,

The maximum
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money
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on publication, while lowest on cinema all three countries. Asia
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67
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percent
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money
on entertainment
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forms
in 1995 which increased 110
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percent
in 2005. 97
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percent
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money
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on various
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forms
of entertainment by Europe and in the
next
five years spending was increase 131. In 1995, United States
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on cinema, production, television, music and video were 187
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percent
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but
this figure incline
considerably
and reached 257 by 2000.
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IELTS academic The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period.

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
149 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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