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The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graphs illustrate the addmission of foreign students and native students in Australian universities in a decade. Overall, it is clearly seen that, the number of foreign students in australian universities was incresase, whereas local students preference was decline a ten year period. Looking for first line graph in more detail, in 2001 nearly 15000 students took addmission in Australian universities and this data was incline sharply to 40000 by 2010. In total, students form other countries were 20000 in 2001 which increase considerably and reached 80000 by 2010
The line graphs illustrate the
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addmission
of foreign
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students
and native
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students
in Australian universities in a decade.

Overall
, it is
clearly
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seen
that, the number of foreign
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students
in
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australian
universities was
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incresase
, whereas local
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students
preference was decline a
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ten year
period.

Looking for
first
line graph in more detail, in 2001
nearly
15000
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students
took
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addmission
in Australian universities and this data was incline
sharply
to 40000 by 2010. In total,
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students
form other countries were 20000 in 2001 which increase
considerably
and reached 80000 by 2010

IELTS academic The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period.

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