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The graph below shows the amount of electricity produced from different energy sources to supply the city of New York between 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the amount of electricity produced from different energy sources to supply the city of New York between 1980 and 2000. aga9
The line graph compares how much energy was generated from three sources to supply New York with electricity from 1980 to 2000. Overall, it is clear that petroleum supplied the most energy. Also, natural gas became a more important source of energy supply than coal during this period. In 1980, petroleum produced about 360 million kw hours of electricity for New York. This figure then rose to 600 million kw hours in 1985, before falling to around 370 million kw hours in 1990. However, there was then a sharp increase, reaching a peak of over 700 million kw hours at the end of the period. On the other hand, coal declined as an energy source. While the figure rose from 220 million to 300 million kw hours from 1980 to 1985, it then decreased steadily to 200 million kw hours in 1990. The figure then remained stable, declining slightly by the year 2000. In contrast, natural gas generated less than 100 million kw hours of electricity in 1980. Production then rose dramatically, overtaking coal in 1990, and reaching a peak of over 500 million kw hours in 2000.
The line graph compares how much
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was generated
from three sources to supply New York with electricity from 1980 to 2000.

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, it is
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that petroleum supplied the most
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energy
.
Also
, natural gas became a more
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important
source of
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supply than coal during this period.

In 1980, petroleum produced about 360
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million
kw
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hours
of electricity for New York. This figure then rose to 600
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in 1985,
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falling to around 370
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million
kw
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hours
in 1990.
However
, there was then a sharp increase, reaching a peak of over 700
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kw
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at the
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end
of the period.
On the other hand
, coal declined as an
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source. While the figure rose from 220
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to 300
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kw
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hours
from 1980 to 1985, it then decreased
steadily
to 200
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million
kw
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hours
in 1990. The figure then remained stable, declining
slightly
by the year 2000.
In contrast
, natural gas generated less than 100
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kw
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of electricity in 1980. Production then rose
dramatically
, overtaking coal in 1990, and reaching a peak of over 500
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in 2000.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the amount of electricity produced from different energy sources to supply the city of New York between 1980 and 2000.

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