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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. 71n5
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of older people, who spent their free time in five various types of activities in the USA from 30 years between the 1980s and 2010. Overall, there was an upward trend in three different activities [internet, watching TV and hiking], While reading book and theater popularity decrease[ some fluctuated] whole the period. If we look at the internet and watching TV, in the 1980s, the internet started with around 5%, it was a slight increase approximately 17%, in the 2000s.
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line graph illustrates the percentage of older
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, who spent their free time in five various types of activities in the USA from 30 years between the 1980s and 2010.

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, there was an upward trend in three
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activities [internet, watching TV and hiking], While reading book and theater popularity decrease
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fluctuated] whole the period.

If we look at the internet and watching TV, in the 1980s, the internet
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with around 5%, it was a slight increase approximately 17%, in the 2000s.

IELTS academic The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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