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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. v.3

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. v. 3
The supplied line graph depicts information about utilisation of energy in the USA since 1980 with predictions until 2030. In general, petrol & oil and coal accounted as high units of fuel consumption in 1980 and will be increased until 2030. In contrast, nuclear, solar/wind and water power were less favourable fuel consumed since 1980 and will be less chosen until 2030. Looking at the details, petrol and oil reckoned about 35 quadrillion units in 1980 and was true as the highest fuel use at the time and has gone up gradually to about 40 quadrillions in 2015 and will increase to more than 45 quadrillions in 2030. The same trend is true for coal resources. The coal consumption was about 16 quadrillion units in 1980 and the figure levelled up through the observed years and is projected to hit the figure of 30 quadrillion units in 2030. Natural gas utilisation seemed fluctuated over observed years and it points about 20 quadrillion unit in 2015. However, it is predicted to level off until 2030. In contrast, nuclear, sun/ wind, and hydropower kept small quantities of fuel consumption compared to other fuel sources as they are projected to a tiny amount of fuel utilisation in 2030. Nuclear use was about 4 quadrillion units in 1980 and in 2030 the figure will hit only about 7 quadrillion units. Solar and hydropower also amassed about 4 quadrillions in 1980 and in 2030, the consumption will be only about 5 quadrillions for solar and hydropower will remain the same figure like it was in 1980.
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of energy in the USA since 1980 with predictions until 2030.
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consumption
in 1980 and will
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consumed since 1980 and will be less chosen until 2030.

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, petrol and oil reckoned about 35 quadrillion
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in 1980 and was true as the highest
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fuel
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at the time and has gone up
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to about 40 quadrillions in 2015 and will increase to more than 45 quadrillions in 2030. The same trend is true for coal resources. The coal
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was about 16 quadrillion
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in 1980 and the
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levelled up through the observed years and
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to hit the
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of 30 quadrillion
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in 2030. Natural gas
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seemed fluctuated over observed years and it points about 20 quadrillion
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in 2015.
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sources as they
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in 2030. Nuclear
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was about 4 quadrillion
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in 1980 and in 2030 the
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will hit
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about 7 quadrillion
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. Solar and hydropower
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about 5 quadrillions for solar and hydropower will remain the same
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. v. 3

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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