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The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.

The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014. 2q2A

The given graph provides information about the sales of three variety widely used products in exact bakery for the year of 2014. Units are measured by numbers. Overall, as it is observed that there are full of increase and decrease in all of items however, the rate of buns does not have any considerable difference by estimating only in the beginning and in the end. Firstly, it can be clearly obvious from the illustrations, in the beginning the figure of bread began from 80billion $ while month by month it decreased to just over 40billion $ and then between March and September purchased bread remained stable. In December it rose to its pick degree by 80 billion $. Secondly, In January the rate of Buns were 40 billion $ while from April to August it went up to highest point by 70 billion $ than it began to fall. Next item was pies, it flactuated from January to October (10billon $ and 20billion $) than it started to go up and picked to 40 billion $

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 graph provides information about the sales of three variety widely
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used
 products in exact bakery for the year of 2014. Units are measured
 by numbers.

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only
 in the beginning and in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
.

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, it can be clearly
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80billion
 $ while month by month it decreased to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
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40billion
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purchased
 bread remained stable. In The comma is probably missing here: "December, it".December, it
December it
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billion
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Secondly
, In January the rate of Buns were 40 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billion
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billion
 $ than it began to fall. Next
 item was pies, it Possible spelling mistake found.fluctuatedfl actuated
flactuated
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20billion
 $) than it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to go up and picked to 40 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billion
 $