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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. WBM0
The given line graph demonstrates and predicts the proportion of newborn compared to that of the citizens who pass away. The data was collected in New Zealand during one century beginning from 1901. Overall, while the birth rate in New Zealand experiences immense fluctuation, the country’s death rate followed a moderately stable movement. Another key characteristic to be noticed is the reversion of positioning between the two figures in 2041. It can be detected that the proportion of birth had climbed dramatically since 1901 and did not reach its peak at approximately 65, 000 until 60 years later. After 1961, it started to encounter numerous downfalls, in which the deepest fall was more than 20%. In contrast, the death rate experienced more stability over the years. In specific, it gradually increased from 10, 000 to almost 39, 000 with minimum amplitude before 2001. Formerly, the death rate increased with a strong trendline and officially exceeded the birth rate at 50, 000 in 2041, becoming the leading figure at the end of the time period.
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line graph demonstrates and predicts the proportion of newborn compared to that of the citizens who pass away. The data
was collected
in New Zealand during one century beginning from 1901.

Overall
, while the birth
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rate
in New Zealand experiences immense fluctuation, the country’s death
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rate
followed a
moderately
stable movement. Another key characteristic to
be noticed
is the reversion of positioning between the two figures in 2041.

It can
be detected
that the proportion of birth had climbed
dramatically
since 1901 and did not reach its peak at approximately 65, 000 until 60 years later. After 1961, it
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started
to encounter numerous downfalls, in which the deepest fall was more than 20%.

In contrast
, the death
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rate
experienced more stability over the years. In specific, it
gradually
increased from 10, 000 to almost 39, 000 with minimum amplitude
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before
2001.
Formerly
, the death
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rate
increased with a strong
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trendline
and
officially
exceeded the birth
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rate
at 50, 000 in 2041, becoming the leading figure at the
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end
of the time period.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

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