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The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. GMd9o
The below figures illustrate what UK graduates and post graduates did, who did not go into full-time employment after leaving college in 2008. To begin with, maximum graduates (29, 665) who did not go into full-time work opted for further studies. while, some of them (16, 235) were unemployed. A slightly higher than unemployed (17, 735) choose to go for part-time work whereas, a small proportion showed interest in voluntary work. On the other hand, almost same scenario was with postgraduates and majority of them (2725) opted for further study. 2535 number of postgraduates took part-time work whereas 1625 postgraduates were unemployed. A small ratio (345) also showed interest in voluntary work. To sum up, the maximum students who did not made their career in job went for higher studies. whereas, some choose to go for part time job and a few of them took voluntary work.
The below figures illustrate what UK graduates and post graduates did, who did not go into full-time employment after leaving college in 2008.

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IELTS academic The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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