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The graph above show information of employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005

What is given in the bar chart below is the employment rate among 6 somehow wealthy countries in 1995 and 2005. As shown, the x-axis of diagram is indicating to the countries’ name and for each of these 6 zone, four bars are plotted. Bars’ color are clustered by gender and year labels and making the information more feasible and quicker to understand. The vertical axis of the plot is showing the percentage employment. At one quick glace it’s easy to understand that unemployment is a more common phenomenon among the women in all countries of this research case and both men and woman in those countries faced unemployment in 2005 due to decreasing in employment percentage in the indicated year. The plot shows that the Australia and New Zealand have the highest rate of unemployment increasing and in opposite side, UK and Switzerland have the least tolerance. It’s also shown that the low populated country like Iceland has the highest employment rate. So to sum up, the modern wealthy countries of indicated in the passage, faced an employment crisis at the end of this ten year period.

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employment
 rate among 6 somehow wealthy You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 in 1995 and 2005.

As shown, the x-axis of diagram is indicating to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries’
 name and for each of these 6 zone, four bars are plotted
. Bars’ color are clustered
 by gender and year labels and making the information more feasible and quicker to understand. The vertical axis of the plot is showing the percentage employment.

At one quick ‘glace’ is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using “glacé”glacé
glace
 it’s easy to understand that unemployment is a more common phenomenon among the women in all You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 of this research case and both This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 and woman in those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 faced unemployment in 2005 due to decreasing in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusinessserviceenrollmenttradejobhiring
employment
 percentage in the indicated year.

The plot This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 that the Australia and New Zealand have the highest rate of unemployment increasing and in opposite side, UK and Switzerland have the least tolerance. It’s also
 shown that the low populated You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 like Iceland has the highest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusinessserviceenrollmenttradejobhiring
employment
 rate. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 to sum up, the modern wealthy You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 of indicated in the passage, faced an You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusinessserviceenrollmenttradejobhiring
employment
 crisis at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of this It seems that a hyphen is missing.ten-year
ten year
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