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The graph above indicates energy comsumption in the United States since 1980 with the estimation of this until the year 2030.

The graph above indicates energy comsumption in the United States since 1980 with the estimation of this until the year 2030. b2DmQ
The graph above indicates energy comsumption in the United States since 1980 with the estimation of this until the year 2030. As is shown by the graph, fossil fuels such as petrol, oil, coal and natural gas have been the main sources of the utilizaton in comparison with nuclear and renewable energies and they are projected to keep doing so in the future. Looking at the details, in 1980, the amount of petrol and oil comsumed was about 35 quadrillion units and it has gone up steadily to approximately 42 quadrillion units in 2015. Coal and natural gas became in second and third after petrol and oil starting respectively at around 20 quadrillion units and 16 quadrillion units. Petrol and oil is predicted to continue rising nearly 50 quadrillion units and so do coal which would reach about 30 quadrillion units in 2013 while natural gas is supposed to level off since 2020. In contrast, nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower enegies share small quantities in fuel consumption. None of them has have any tremendous changes since 1980. They stood at around 3 quadrillion units at the beginning and they only hit the point of about 5 quadrillion units in 2030 except hydropower which would be at the same level as in 1980.
The graph above indicates energy
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comsumption
in the United States since 1980 with the estimation of

this until the year 2030.

As
is shown
by the graph, fossil fuels such as
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petrol
,
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oil
, coal and natural gas have been the main sources

of the
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utilizaton
in comparison
with nuclear and renewable
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energies and
they
are projected
to
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keep
doing

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so
in the future.

Looking at the
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details
, in 1980, the amount of
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petrol
and
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oil
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comsumed
was about 35 quadrillion
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units
and

it has gone up
steadily
to approximately 42 quadrillion
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units
in 2015. Coal and natural gas became in

second and third after
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petrol
and
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oil
starting
respectively
at around 20 quadrillion
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units
and 16 quadrillion

units.
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Petrol
and
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oil
is predicted
to continue rising
nearly
50 quadrillion
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units
and
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so
do coal which would

reach about 30 quadrillion
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units
in 2013 while natural gas
is supposed
to level off since 2020.

In contrast
, nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower
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enegies
share
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small
quantities in fuel consumption. None

of them has
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have
any tremendous
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changes
since 1980. They stood at around 3 quadrillion
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units
at the

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beginning and
they
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only
hit the point of about 5 quadrillion
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in 2030 except hydropower which

would be at the same level as in 1980.
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IELTS academic The graph above indicates energy comsumption in the United States since 1980 with the estimation of this until the year 2030.

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