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The given diagram illustrates the process of making liquid chocolate from cacao tree.

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The given diagram illustrates the process of making liquid chocolate from cacao tree. It can be clearly seen that chocolate production involves ten main stages, commencing with harvesting ripe red pod from cacao trees and finishing with pressing inner part of cocoa beans to get liquid chocolate. At the beginning of the process, ripe red pods are collected from cacao trees which are indigenous to South America, Africa and Indonesia. After that, white cocoa beans are picked from these pods before undergoing a fermentation process. In the next step, fermented cocoa beans are put in large trays and exposed under the sun to get dehydrated. Then, these dried beans are stored in large sacks with certain weight. Following that, sacks of beans are transported to factory by train or lorry. In the factory, beans are roasted with 350 degrees. Next, roasted beans are crushed by a grinder to move the outer shell, crushed beans are collected after this stage. At the end of the process, the inner part of beans is pressed by pressing machine to produce liquid chocolate.
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diagram illustrates the
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process
of making liquid chocolate from cacao tree.

It can be
clearly
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seen
that chocolate production involves ten main stages, commencing with harvesting ripe red pod from cacao trees and finishing with pressing inner part of cocoa
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beans
to
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get
liquid chocolate.

At the beginning of the
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process
, ripe red pods
are collected
from cacao trees which are indigenous to South America, Africa and Indonesia. After that, white cocoa
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beans
are picked
from these pods
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before
undergoing a fermentation
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process
. In the
next
step, fermented cocoa
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beans
are put
in large trays and exposed under the sun to
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get
dehydrated. Then, these dried
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beans
are stored
in large sacks with certain weight. Following that, sacks of
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beans
are transported
to factory by train or lorry. In the factory,
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beans
are roasted
with 350 degrees.
Next
, roasted
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beans
are crushed
by a grinder to
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move
the outer shell, crushed
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beans
are collected
after this stage. At the
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end
of the
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process
, the inner part of
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beans
is pressed
by pressing machine to produce liquid chocolate.
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IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates the process of making liquid chocolate from cacao tree.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
179 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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