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The graph displays and compares the monthly average temperature of London, New York and Sydney.

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The graph displays and compares the monthly average temperature of London, New York and Sydney. As is observed, the temperature pattern of New York and London is almost identical, while that of Sydney shows a reverse tendency. Specifically, in January, the total temperature of Sydney took the lead, at about 25°C, tailed by the data of London, with under 10°C. Moreover, New York is the coolest area whose temperature is 8 times less than that of the warmest one. During the next 6 months, there is a significant escalation in the average degrees of New York and London which reaches a peak at 32°C and 25°C respectively. In contrast, the weather in Sydney cools down and it becomes the coldest region with 15°C. Additionally, the weather of New York is milder in November, with a 23°C plummet in the average degrees. Besides, these statistics of London witness a gradual decrease of 15°C. The reverse is the case of Sydney's temperature, which shows an upward tendency from 15°C to 24°C. Furthermore, in December, Sydney's total temperature rises to reach the first place, at 25°C, with 20°C and 15°C more than that of the other two.
The graph displays and compares the monthly average
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temperature
of London,
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New
York and Sydney.

As
is observed
, the
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temperature
pattern of
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New
York and London is almost identical, while that of Sydney
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shows
a reverse tendency.

Specifically
, in January, the total
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temperature
of Sydney took the lead, at about
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25°C
, tailed by the data of London, with under
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10°C
.
Moreover
,
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New
York is the coolest area whose
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temperature
is 8 times less than that of the warmest one. During the
next
6 months, there is a significant escalation in the average degrees of
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New
York and London which reaches a peak at
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32°C
and
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25°C
respectively
.
In contrast
, the weather in Sydney cools down and it becomes the coldest region with
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15°C
.

Additionally
, the weather of
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New
York is milder in November, with a
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23°C
plummet in the average degrees.
Besides
, these statistics of London witness a gradual decrease of
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15°C
. The reverse is the case of Sydney's
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temperature
, which
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shows
an upward tendency from
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15°C
to
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24°C
.
Furthermore
, in December, Sydney's total
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temperature
rises to reach the
first
place, at
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25°C
, with
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20°C
and
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15°C
more than that of the other two.
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