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The graph about technology that households in one us city used for watching television between 2004 and 2014

The graph about technology that households in one us city used for watching television between 2004 and 2014 mmjd

The line graph compares four sectors in technology used for watching television over period of 10 years in one us city It is clear that the internet use increased sigifically from 10000 households to 190000 households in period of 2004 to 2014. where as the broadcast use is decreased about 80000 households in period of 10 years In 2004 the use of broadcast technology was about 90000 households. the cable use was about 85000 households, satellite use was 75000 while, there is less number of users for internet.

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 for watching television over period of 10 years in one us city

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 was about 85000 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withordinaryeveryday
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, satellite This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
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 was 75000 while, there is less number of users for internet. 

IELTS academic The graph about technology that households in one us city used for watching television between 2004 and 2014

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American English

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88 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

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Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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