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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. BAyw
The graph illustrates the different types of activities done by aged people in their spare time in United States over a period of 1980 to 2010. Overall, watching TV being the most popular among all. We can see that activities which are listed have been increased in popularity amongst the elderly, while hiking has increasing steadily throughout the years. In the 1980s, nearly all activities were growing popularly. The only activity which has become less popular over these year was theatre. Theatre declined steeply from 50% to 30% in a decade. Activities like hiking, reading, surfing the Internet have been increasing in popularity. However watching watching TV decreased from 60% to 55% during 2000s. Despite this, watching TV is still the second most popular activity amongst the group. Mostly elder people are hiking nowadays in their free time.
The graph illustrates the
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different
types of
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activities
done by aged
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people
in their spare time
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in United States
over a period of 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, watching TV being the most popular among all. We can
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see
that
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activities
which
are listed
have
been increased
in popularity
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amongst
the elderly, while hiking has increasing
steadily
throughout the years. In the 1980s,
nearly
all
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activities
were growing
popularly
. The
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only
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activity
which has become less popular over
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these year
was
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theatre
.
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Theatre
declined
steeply
from 50% to 30% in a decade.
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Activities
like hiking, reading, surfing the Internet have been increasing in popularity.
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However
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watching watching
TV decreased from 60% to 55%
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during 2000s
. Despite this, watching TV is
still
the second most popular
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activity
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amongst
the group.
Mostly
elder
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people
are hiking nowadays in their free time.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

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  American English
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138 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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