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The given table illustrates the quantity of hours of leisure activities per year in Someland, classified into seven distinctive age groups

The given table illustrates the quantity of hours of leisure activities per year in Someland, classified into seven distinctive age groups O6rlG
The given table illustrates the quantity of hours of leisure activities per year in Someland, classified into seven distinctive age groups. As is revealed from the table, overall, it is obvious that while watching TV/videos is the most popular choice among residents in Someland, the amount of time using for going to the cinema and communicating with at least 4 people was the lowest, especially in people aged 40 to 59 and 50+, respectively. To be more specific, the quantity of hours teenagers spend watching tv/video is the highest figure shown on the table with 1, 200 hours, doubling that of people in their 50 in Someland. By contrast, teens just spend only 100 hours on cinema per year, equally the total figure of three age categories from 40 to 69 years old. Besides, netizens in Someland in their 20 use 150 hours for socializing with 4 or fewer people, twofold lower than the amount of time of people aged 30 to 39. On the other hand, residents between 13 to 29 years old spend 300 hours communicating with at least 4 persons annually, doubling the total figure of the five remaining age groups. Moreover, the amount of time of individual exercise in the aged 70+ group is 150 hours, 50 hours higher than that of people in their 20. Finally, as the age increases, the interest in group sport declines and netizens aged 60+ and 70+ do not exercise in groups anymore.
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of leisure activities per
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Someland
, classified into seven distinctive
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overall
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Someland
, the amount of time using for going to the cinema and communicating with at least 4
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people
was the lowest,
especially
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people
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aged
40 to 59 and 50+,
respectively
.

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hours
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teenagers
spend watching
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/video is the highest figure shown on the table with 1, 200
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hours
, doubling that of
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people
in their 50 in
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Someland
. By contrast, teens
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spend
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100
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on cinema per
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,
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categories from 40 to 69 years
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.
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Someland
in their 20
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150
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for socializing with 4 or fewer
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30 to 39.

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spend 300
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communicating with at least 4 persons
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age
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groups
.
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, the amount of time of individual exercise in the
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aged
70+
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is 150
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, 50
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higher than that of
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people
in their 20.
Finally
, as the
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age
increases, the interest in
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group
sport declines and netizens
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aged
60+ and 70+ do not exercise in
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groups
anymore.
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IELTS academic The given table illustrates the quantity of hours of leisure activities per year in Someland, classified into seven distinctive age groups

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