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The given pie charts illustrate the number of people watching various TV programs in three distinctive age categories

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The given pie charts illustrate the number of people watching various TV programs in three distinctive age categories. As is revealed from the pie charts, it is obvious that films and dramas are widely enjoyed from all surveyed ages range. Moreover, while sport made up the highest proportion of the youngest group, the reversal is true for the two remaining age groups. To be more specific, the rate of news viewers aged 21 to 25 was the highest figure, with 33%, over fivefold and nearly twofold higher than that of the group of 10- to 15 and 16- to 20-year olds, respectively. By contrast, the lowest number of people watching sport belonged to adults from 21 to 25 years old with 4%, about threefold lower than that of watchers aged 16 to 20, almost sixfold smaller than the figure for children. On the other hand, the majority of children aged 10 to 15 loving to watching cartoons with 26%, 11% and 6% higher than the figures for 16- to 20 and 21- to 25-year-olds, correspondingly. Finally, the total quantities of films watchers of the group of 10- to 15-years old and 21- to 25- years old was 40%, approximately similar to the numbers for dramas in these two age groups, 10% lower than that of people aged 16 to 20.
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from the pie charts, it is obvious that films and dramas are
widely
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, while sport made up the highest proportion of the youngest
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group
, the reversal is true for the two remaining
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age
groups.

To be more specific, the rate of news viewers
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aged
21 to 25 was the highest figure, with 33%, over fivefold and
nearly
twofold higher than that of the
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group
of 10- to 15 and 16- to
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20-year
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respectively
. By contrast, the lowest number of
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people
watching sport belonged to adults from 21 to 25 years
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old
with 4%, about threefold lower than that of watchers
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aged
16 to 20, almost sixfold smaller than the figure for children.

On the other hand
, the majority of children
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aged
10 to 15 loving to watching cartoons with 26%, 11% and 6% higher than the figures for 16- to 20 and 21- to 25-year-olds,
correspondingly
.
Finally
, the total quantities of films watchers of the
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group
of 10- to 15-years
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old
and 21- to 25- years
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old
was 40%, approximately similar to the numbers for dramas in these two
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age
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groups
, 10% lower than that of
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aged
16 to 20.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts illustrate the number of people watching various TV programs in three distinctive age categories

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