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The given pie charts illustrate the rate of people’s total expense in a specific country in Europe for various purposes between 1958 and 2008.

The given pie charts illustrate the rate of people’s total expense in a specific country in Europe for various purposes between 1958 and 2008. ob68K
The given pie charts illustrate the rate of people’s total expense in a specific country in Europe for various purposes between 1958 and 2008. As is revealed from the pie charts, it is obvious that while the percentage of spending on housing, travel and luxury goods segments followed the upward trend, the opposite trend was true for food, clothing and entertainment in two distinctive years: 1958 and 2008. To be more specific, in 1958, food made up the highest ratio of expenditure, with 32%, fourfold higher than that of travel and 10% bigger than housing. This figure then declined by exactly a fifth after 50 years. Besides, standing at 13% in 1958, the expense on entertainment saw a drop of approximately a half over the period of 50 years. Additionally, the amount of money that people used for clothing covered 18% in 1958 and then decreased to 16% in 2008. On the other hand, the spending on housing occupied 22% in 1958, which then rose considerably by 10% during five decades. Finally, the expenditure on travel and luxury items accounted for 17% in 2008, from the initial figures of 8 and 7% in 1958, respectively
The
given
pie charts illustrate the rate of
people
’s total expense in a specific country in Europe for various purposes between 1958 and 2008.

As
is revealed
from the pie charts, it is obvious that while the percentage of spending on housing, travel and luxury
goods
segments followed the upward trend, the opposite trend was true for food, clothing and entertainment in two distinctive years: 1958 and 2008.

To be more specific, in 1958, food made up the highest ratio of expenditure, with 32%, fourfold higher than that of travel and 10% bigger than housing. This figure then declined by exactly a fifth after 50 years.
Besides
, standing at 13% in 1958, the expense on entertainment
saw
a drop of approximately a half over the period of 50 years.
Additionally
, the amount of money that
people
used
for clothing covered 18% in 1958 and then decreased to 16% in 2008.

On the other hand
, the spending on housing occupied 22% in 1958, which then rose
considerably
by 10% during five decades.
Finally
, the expenditure on travel and luxury items accounted for 17% in 2008, from the initial figures of 8 and 7% in 1958,
respectively
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IELTS academic The given pie charts illustrate the rate of people’s total expense in a specific country in Europe for various purposes between 1958 and 2008.

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