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The given table illustrates the data of age group, income per capita, and population under the poverty line.

The given table illustrates the data of age group, income per capita, and population under the poverty line. EwLAq
The given table illustrates the data of age group, income per capita, and population under the poverty line. Overall, it is clear that Florida has more elders, whereas Utah has the highest young population. All the information is in the percentage, and the average income per capita is in US dollars. Having an eagle eye on the table, it is crystal clear that Florida has (16%) population which is below the age of 18; however, California has (17%), and Utah has (28%). On the other hand, Florida has the highest number of people who are above the age of 60. The numbers are 23%. In addition, California and Utah have 13% and 8% elder population respectively. Moving further, although California is the highest per capita earning state (23000$), 16% of locals are living below the poverty line. Moreover, in Florida, the average earning per individual is 22000$; nevertheless, 12% of the residences are living below the poverty criteria. Furthermore, in Utah, 17000 $ is the average person's income, but 9% population is under the poverty line.
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table illustrates the data of age group, income per capita, and
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population
under the
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poverty
line.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that Florida has more elders, whereas Utah has the highest young
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population
. All the information is in the percentage, and the average income per capita is in US dollars.

Having an eagle eye on the table, it is crystal
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clear
that Florida has (16%)
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population
which is below the age of 18;
however
, California has (17%), and Utah has (28%).
On the other hand
, Florida has the highest number of
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people
who are above the age of 60. The numbers are 23%.
In addition
, California and Utah have 13% and 8% elder
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population
respectively
.

Moving
further
, although California is the highest per capita earning state (
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$23000".
23000$
), 16% of locals are living below the
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poverty
line.
Moreover
, in Florida, the average earning per individual is
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$22000".
22000$
;
nevertheless
, 12% of the residences are living below the
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poverty
criteria.
Furthermore
, in Utah,
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17000 $
is the average person's income,
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but
9%
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population
is under the
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poverty
line.
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IELTS academic The given table illustrates the data of age group, income per capita, and population under the poverty line.

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