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The given plans demonstrate some major changes to a school library in the duration of 5 years.

The given plans demonstrate some major changes to a school library in the duration of 5 years. KQkR
The given plans demonstrate some major changes to a school library in the duration of 5 years. Overall, the school mostly renovated its library in terms of facilities while keeping the same size. The most noticeable difference in the library was 4 studying tables in the center of the room, as 2 more were added as well as they were all divided into private sections instead of large whole tables. On either side of the studying tables, there were 2 long bookshelves. However, the one in the bottom of the map was removed to make room for student's laptops desks. In addition, other desks for laptops were added in the place of desks used for conventional computers. Also in the 5 year period, the library office has been converted into a conference room in the bottom right corner of the plan. To the left of the studying area, some renovations could also be observed. In the lower corner, the library now has 2 separated borrowing and returning areas instead of 1 joined desk. Besides, there is now a recording room occupying the space used for a classroom, while the meeting room is still remaining.
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major
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to a school library in the duration of 5 years.
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, the school
mostly
renovated its library in terms of facilities while keeping the same size.

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room
, as 2 more were
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added
as well
as they were all divided into private sections
instead
of large whole tables. On either side of the studying tables, there were 2 long bookshelves.
However
, the one in the bottom of the map
was removed
to
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room
for student's laptops
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desks
.
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, other
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desks
for laptops were
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added
in the place of
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desks
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used
for conventional computers.
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in the
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5 year
period, the library office has
been converted
into a conference
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room
in the bottom right corner of the plan.

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left
of the studying area,
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renovations could
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be observed
. In the lower corner, the library
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has 2 separated borrowing and returning areas
instead
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joined
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desk
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, there is
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now
a recording
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room
occupying the space
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used
for a classroom, while the meeting
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is
still
remaining.

IELTS academic The given plans demonstrate some major changes to a school library in the duration of 5 years.

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6.0
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