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The graph below shows the number of visitors each month to the zoo's most popular exhibits. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of visitors each month to the zoo's most popular exhibits. eLoO
The line chart indicates the number of people who visit the zoo’s most popular exhibits each month. The first impression from the chart is the number of visitors reached at peak in August. There are three different exhibits in the zoo and they are aquarium, giant pandas, penguin encounter. In January the number of tourists for all exhibitions were almost equal and they were nearly 170. 000. There was a significant increase in the numbers for all between January and August. The number of visitors for Giant Pandas was the highest with roughly 550. 00 and Aquarium’s was higher than Penguin Encounter’s. from August to November exhibitions’ tourist attractions had decreased drastically to 200. 000, however; it followed by a rise in December. To sum up, the number of people who visited Giant Pandas outnumbered other two exhibitions from January to November. However, between November and December visitors of Penguin Encounter were the highest. Moreover, there was a fluctuation in the lines of visitors.
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reached at peak in August.

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different
exhibits in the
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they are aquarium, giant pandas, penguin encounter. In January the
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of tourists for all exhibitions were almost
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equal and
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170. 000. There was a significant increase in the
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for all between January and August. The
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of
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for Giant Pandas was the highest with roughly 550. 00 and
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was higher than Penguin Encounter’s.
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August to November exhibitions’ tourist attractions had decreased
drastically
to 200. 000,
however
; it followed by a rise in December.

To sum up, the
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who visited Giant Pandas outnumbered other two exhibitions from January to November.
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, between November and December
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visitors
of Penguin Encounter were the highest.
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, there was a fluctuation in the lines of
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of visitors each month to the zoo's most popular exhibits.

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