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The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area. v.2

The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area. v. 2
The diagrams present data on the medical research funding for six deadly diseases in Someland as well as the deaths caused by those diseases in 1990. A glance at the charts reveals that there was a correlation between the amount spent on researching a disease and the casualties it caused- the higher funding generally produced a better result, at least for AIDS and TB. According to the illustration, the highest medical research budget was allowed for AIDS, around 175 million and in 1990 the death count in Someland from AIDS was 0. 25 million, more than death from Leprosy but fewer than fatalities caused by any other diseases. Again, the lowest research budget was for TB (roughly 25 million) and around 1. 75 million people died from this illness, the highest casualties from any disease in Someland in 1990. Medical research reserves for Leprosy and Tropical Diseases were exactly the same, approximately 70 million but deaths from the later disease were noticeably higher.   A similar trend could be observed in the cases of Diarrhoea and Malaria, which received around 60 and 50 million respectively for medical research and were responsible for 0. 5 and 0. 35 million deaths in Someland.
The diagrams present data on the
medical
research
funding for six deadly
diseases
in
Someland
as well
as the deaths caused by those
diseases
in 1990. A glance at the charts reveals that there was a correlation between the amount spent on researching a
disease
and the casualties it caused- the higher funding
generally
produced a better result, at least for AIDS and TB.

According to the illustration, the highest
medical
research
budget was
allowed
for AIDS, around 175
million
and in 1990 the death count in
Someland
from AIDS was 0. 25
million
, more than death from Leprosy
but
fewer than fatalities caused by any other
diseases
. Again, the lowest
research
budget was for TB (roughly 25
million)
and around 1. 75
million
people
died
from this illness, the highest casualties from any
disease
in
Someland
in 1990.
Medical
research
reserves for Leprosy and Tropical
Diseases
were exactly the same, approximately 70
million
but
deaths from the later
disease
were
noticeably
higher.
 
A similar trend could
be observed
in the cases of
Diarrhoea
and Malaria, which received around 60 and 50
million
respectively
for
medical
research
and were responsible for 0. 5 and 0. 35
million
deaths in
Someland
.
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