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The given maps illustrate the transformation of a conference hall during two separate years, 2009 and 2010.

The given maps illustrate the transformation of a conference hall during two separate years, 2009 and 2010. KVmp1
The given maps illustrate the transformation of a conference hall during two separate years, 2009 and 2010. As can be seen from the maps, the trade conference has been completely transformed after the construction of several facilities. In terms of the first picture, the registration was located between the main entrance and side entrance on the north side of the hall. While there was a complex place on the left side including a concert hall and stage. Although they all had the same arrangement of seats for audiences with a display area in front of them, the meeting room possessed a stage while the concert hall did not. On the right of the conference, an exhibition area was built next to the balcony in 2009. Looking at the remaining one, registration was moved next to the balcony and replaced with a refreshment area. On top of that, the concert hall and meeting room were removed and made room for a large exhibition area. Moreover, the balcony in the southeast corner was equipped with a lounge area. On top of that, a new concert hall was constructed in the place of exhibition area in 2009, with a stage and a number of seats. Finally, the display area was cleared in 2010.
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maps illustrate the transformation of a conference
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hall
during two separate years, 2009 and 2010.

As can be
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seen
from the maps, the trade conference has been completely transformed after the construction of several facilities.

In terms of the
first
picture, the registration
was located
between the main entrance and side entrance on the north side of the
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hall
. While there was a complex place on the
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left
side including a
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concert
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hall
and stage. Although they all had the same arrangement of seats for audiences with a display
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area
in front of them, the meeting room possessed a stage while the
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concert
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hall
did not. On the right of the conference, an exhibition
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area
was built
next
to the balcony in 2009.

Looking at the remaining one, registration was
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moved
next
to the balcony and replaced with a refreshment
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area
.
On top of that
, the
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concert
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hall
and meeting room
were removed
and made room for a large exhibition
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area
.
Moreover
, the balcony in the southeast corner
was equipped
with a lounge
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area
.
On top of that
, a new
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concert
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hall
was constructed
in the place of exhibition
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area
in 2009, with a stage and a number of seats.
Finally
, the display
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area
was cleared
in 2010.
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IELTS academic The given maps illustrate the transformation of a conference hall during two separate years, 2009 and 2010.

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6.5
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