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The given maps illustrate how the campus of Malvern Nature school was in 1999 and its refurbishment plans for 2029.

The given maps illustrate how the campus of Malvern Nature school was in 1999 and its refurbishment plans for 2029. gWGLd
The given maps illustrate how the campus of Malvern Nature school was in 1999 and its refurbishment plans for 2029. Overall, it is readily apparent that in the future more school buildings will be there and the future and the parking area will also be expanded. In 1999, the school only had two buildings to the north and south of the path, and the sports fields occupied most of the part in the eastern end of the connecting path. There was only one car park in 1999, which was just outside the main entrance. According to the future plans for 2029, a new school building will be constructed at the place of old sports ground and the older buildings will also be connected to each other, and the path will join this and the new building together. Besides the school building 3, to its east, there will be a brand-new car parking, and for allowing people to reach to this, a road will emerge from the main old road to this parking lot. A new sports ground will also be made at the cost of some trees which will be located to the right of the new branched road, close to the car park 2. However, this field will be significantly smaller than the old one.
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Malvern
Nature
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was in 1999 and its refurbishment plans for 2029.

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, it is
readily
apparent that in the future more
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school
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buildings
will be there and the future and the parking area will
also
be expanded
.

In 1999, the
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school
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only
had two
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buildings
to the north and south of the path, and the sports fields occupied most of the part in the eastern
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end
of the connecting path. There was
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only
one car park in 1999, which was
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just
outside the main entrance.

According to the future plans for 2029, a
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school
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building
will
be constructed
at the place of
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sports ground and the older
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buildings
will
also
be connected
to each other, and the path will
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join
this and the
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new
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building
together.
Besides
the
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school
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building
3, to its east, there will be a brand-new car parking, and for allowing
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people
to reach to this, a road will emerge from the main
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old
road to this parking lot. A
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new
sports ground will
also
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at the cost of
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some
trees which will
be located
to the right of the
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branched road, close to the car park 2.
However
, this field will be
significantly
smaller than the
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one.
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IELTS academic The given maps illustrate how the campus of Malvern Nature school was in 1999 and its refurbishment plans for 2029.

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