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The diagrams represent information about the different stages in the life of the silkworm and the process of production of silk cloth.

The diagrams represent information about the different stages in the life of the silkworm and the process of production of silk cloth. WnYMN
The diagrams represent information about the different stages in the life of the silkworm and the process of production of silk cloth. Overall, it is apparent from the diagrams that there are four steps involved in the lifecycle of the silkworm, starting from eggs and ending with cocoon, after which manufacturing of silk cloth continues, which consists of five steps. With regards to the lifecycle of the silkworm, first of all, eggs are produced on the leaves of the mulberry plant. In ten days, the eggs are converted into larva, and they eat mulberry plant leaves as food. After 4 to 6 weeks, they are transformed into silk thread, inside which larva is present, and finally, in the next 3 to 8 days, it turns into a cocoon. Once the eggs are converted into a cocoon, then the production of silk cloth starts. The first step involves the selection of cocoons. After its selection, they are boiled in water, and then the process of unwinding starts, which is then twisted and weaved to form a dye.
The diagrams represent information about the
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different
stages in the life of the silkworm and the process of production of
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silk
cloth.

Overall
, it is apparent from the diagrams that there are four steps involved in the lifecycle of the silkworm, starting from eggs and ending with cocoon, after which manufacturing of
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silk
cloth continues, which consists of five steps.

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With regards to
the lifecycle of the silkworm,
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first of all
, eggs
are produced
on the
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leaves
of the mulberry plant. In ten days, the eggs
are converted
into larva, and they eat mulberry plant
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leaves
as food. After 4 to 6 weeks, they
are transformed
into
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silk
thread, inside which larva is present, and
finally
, in the
next
3 to 8 days, it turns into a cocoon.

Once the eggs
are converted
into a cocoon, then the production of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
silk
cloth
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starts
. The
first
step involves the selection of cocoons. After its selection, they
are boiled
in water, and then the process of unwinding
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starts
, which is then twisted and weaved to form a dye.
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IELTS academic The diagrams represent information about the different stages in the life of the silkworm and the process of production of silk cloth.

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6.5
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